| 2020-06-15 18:28:46 |
HOBO Chapters 1,2 and 3
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Hi Rhiannon, I haven't had a chance to read HOBO yet, but I want to say welcome back. Game of inches is one of my all-time favorites on this site, and I enjoyed My sister-in-law Beth as well. Glad you came through brain surgery to grace us with a new story. Looking forward to reading HOBO. |
| 2020-06-16 14:13:44 |
HOBO Chapter Four
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Excellent story so far. It could use some good editing, but love the story itself. |
| 2020-06-16 19:37:55 |
Hobo - Chapter 10 & 11
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Excellent story Rhiannon! Some people just come here to read pure erotica. This is an excellent store with erotic content. The only issue I have is that there are a lot of grammatical errors, but I like the story, so I can overlook. You should think about using Grammarly; even the free version will help. If you wait a while, they will offer it to you half price for paid version. Its worth it if you love writing, and want to put out something more professional. Either way, can't wait for next chapters! |
| 2020-06-17 15:21:07 |
Feels Like the First Time - 1
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Excellent work! A definite improvement in your writing. There may be some mistakes, but nothing jumped out at me. So, great job! |
| 2020-06-22 18:32:03 |
Skeletons in my Closet part c
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Love the story itself, but you could use some help with your writing. Punctuation is your biggest issue. But the story is still readable. |