| 2014-04-10 20:25:57 |
Life of Mary
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The biggest thing you could do is work on your spacing between paragraphs. A sold block of print is hard to read. I also agree you should go into a little more detail also. I think it has potential and would like to see more. |
| 2014-09-10 17:03:08 |
Fucking Teagan - The Complete Novel - edited
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Other then the spacing great story. I'm still not sure about having one long story over multiple chapters but I'll give you high marks anyway. |
| 2014-04-14 05:13:30 |
Revenge, Pt 8 : Name Games_(0)
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Please continue this great story. The only thing that could be improved on it is to add some lesbian action. Say the friend the sister is trying to set him up with. |
| 2014-07-16 03:23:17 |
The Maintenance Man 5
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Keep up the good work and thank you for giving me a reason to stay. |
| 2014-07-01 09:42:32 |
Revenge, Pt 12: The Aftercare_(0)
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While I found this chapter a little boring, i would still like to see what happens next. So post the next chapter as soon as you feel it's ready. |