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Comments from fbailey
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-09-19 14:03:19 | The best shower ever | Not bad for a first attempt. I actually enjoyed it. You need to proofread your stories, ME and MY especially. There were way too many small errors in a short story like that. Not a lot of sixteen-year-old boys have eight inch cocks. His cock was still in her pussy when he worked three fingers into her virgin asshole…you bet she screamed…but she still let him butt-fuck her. Like I said…not bad for a first attempt. Just read it yourself once or twice before submitting the next one and don’t skip over the small words either. |
| 2008-09-19 14:12:48 | A Sore Night Out –story 8 | You don't need to read STORY the previous stories to enjoy this. I have a real problem when the first sentence is screwed up. |
| 2008-09-19 14:19:36 | Free and Single and Looking for Fun – story 7 | You are 23 years old and all 9 of your stories are TRUE. 5 contain Prostitution 3 contain Slavery 3 contain Rape I feel very sorry for you. |
| 2008-09-20 14:07:33 | Without Love (edited & reposted) | edited & reposted Why didn't you take the time to do it right the first time? |
| 2008-09-20 14:09:51 | Weekend at the Spa | We have been for seven years and had two children Have been what? When you do something like that in the very first sentence I have a hard time reading it. |