| 2018-06-02 19:24:04 |
Chinese Talismans
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This is a good story with a nice approach to some ancient mysticism from China. |
| 2018-06-16 02:52:32 |
The Sexy Meet
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Submissions from a phone never go over well. I would suggest using a real word processor from a lap top or a tower to write your story. Also some proof reading before you submit would greatly help. Try it again. 5/10 |
| 2018-12-22 14:11:25 |
My brother changed me
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It's a good story but the delivery could use a bit of work. Large text blocks make reading difficult and will have the tendency of shutting down some readers. What I have found that works really well is to double space between the dialogue of the characters and the deive text. This will help make the document more readable. Re-read you text before submitting as well. There are numerous punctuation errors and run on sentences. Take a look at the My Asian Treat series for an example. The form and presentation make the text easy to read. Otherwise it's a good story. |
| 2019-02-23 02:32:35 |
L.I.S.S.A. C
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Sorry about that. I missed an 's' with the spell checker. But if that is your biggest gripe then I am in good shape. |
| 2021-01-08 06:41:14 |
Rebecca, Do My Bidding CH4
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She really is. |