| 2017-09-06 15:36:15 |
Babysitting for my Uncle
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This story built up the anticipation and then had a dramatic climax. It leaves the plot open to more. Very nicely told by someone with a feeling for the subject. |
| 2015-06-27 03:09:59 |
The Iceberg reveals a Sorority Secret
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This was a true story nothing was added to embellish it. It connects a real life neighbor and videos made thirty years later doing what she implied at the sorority. The moaner was added to get the word count up as she was a colorful character too. All characters are real people. |
| 2015-09-04 21:25:45 |
Hostage romance chapter 1
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Write when you can. Do not miss your studies. Math is important..like knowing if you were paid enough for your work. The story is more important than the grammar or spelling but, writing correctly is also an important skill. Anyone can write and taking more time makes it better. Gertrude Stein did not even edit her stuff half the time and it is way to long to be good. Hemingway wrote a few sentences every day. Sometimes he wrote much more but., he always wrote a little. Enjoy it when you can and do not worry about the negative comments. If they want to pay for reading they can get better work. I am published, have written for the screen and have been a publisher and I do not even proof or edit many times because, I am not getting paid to do it here. I do it for fun. |
| 2017-11-19 03:30:22 |
Cindi's Top Tips for Sibling Success
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Thought provoking, entertaining and enlightening. A good read on many levels. A hint that mom might have started the whole process. Clipping the fingers off rubber gloves to "try on" some appendage, Mentioning vasectomies performed on children in Mexico or by veterinarians. |
| 2015-12-31 02:02:19 |
My first Time_(20)
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This is a sweet story. Girls do need their Daddy dick, especially when Mommy is gone. It can hurt at first in any case but, Daddy needs to feel your tightness as much as you need to feel the fullness of him inside. A short but, sweet story. It is ok that you had to edit it but, I would want to read in unedited too! It would be hot in an email for example. I would want to be your Daddy any time at all. ~* ~* ~* |