| 2019-09-20 03:49:55 |
Missy: Day Nine - After School
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one of the best stories I have read here |
| 2019-09-25 03:48:23 |
Missy: Day Ten
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Great story! keep it going! |
| 2019-09-27 05:00:07 |
Movie Night 5
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This is great! Keep it up, I am looking forward to all 3 of them enjoying each other. one of the best stories I have read here! |
| 2020-08-27 05:35:16 |
How Traditions Start – Part 16
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I loved this chapter, and entire story from the start, as well as all of your other stories. I agree with naughtydragon's synopsis, and would like to see the entire family have a weekend of fun together. I have enjoyed all of your stories. Thank you!! |
| 2020-09-02 20:04:29 |
Franny,Olga Etc
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It seems rushed, and not put together well. I think this story could be a lot better if there were more details, adjectives, and adverbs about the cummings and goings(pun intended);In a more straight line story a paragraph is not a chapter.. in most cases any way. Try writing an out line first, then re read stuff as you go, You'll know if it flows correctly. Don't give up tho, every mistake is a chance to learn and grow! |