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Comments from Siralias
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2020-08-17 04:58:33 | Across Eternity: Book 1 | SPOILERS: What the hell, man? One of only two main characters (the only one with a personality!) dies a nearly random death halfway through? That's fucking depressing. Don't kill interesting characters when you have so few. I skipped to the end, and I know that her death is explained, but it just feels... disappointing. She had an arc. I cared, just a bit. I can't enjoy this story after that, Sage. Go read the Wandering Inn. That is a masterclass in how to kill characters. Mainly, by having more than enough remaining people to continue the story, and by building the tension before death. There, I was so sad I cried. Here, I was just upset and confused. |
| 2020-08-17 05:22:12 | Family Trip to Jamaica Part 3 | This story has been done really well. Thanks for writing it! |
| 2020-11-23 19:20:16 | Jackie’s Neighbour Part 3 | Please go over this with a mind for editing; its nearly unreadable. That second paragraph is almost entirely one sentence. |
| 2021-03-14 04:34:04 | Covid Gloryhole Ch1 | Good story! You have a good instinct for writing. Looking forward to more. A quick note: go over your story a couple times for spelling and grammar errors. “Ah yes” he relied “follow me” --> “Ah yes” he replied “follow me” |