| 2019-09-08 01:44:40 |
Camping with my little Brother and Sister
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Captain, the concept is great but the story lacks so much punctuation that it's hard to enjoy reading it. |
| 2019-09-08 01:57:46 |
Jessica Alba does more than nudity.
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Your writing is improving! I suggest better story and character development, not just sex, sex, sex. There are several great authors here (James Dylan Dean and Leslie Tara come to mind immediately.) whose stories are stimulating in every way: good solid characters, believable storylines, and great sex. Finally, please use punctuation! It makes a story readable. Keep trying to improve and take your time. At least, I do read your offerings regularly. |
| 2019-09-08 02:36:56 |
Me and the ‘Family’
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The hymen is not inside the vagina! It's actually at the outer rim and it doesn't cover the entrance. It is almost a half circular piece of tissue ringing a portion of the entrance. Look it up and you'll understand what I am saying. |
| 2019-10-10 02:38:28 |
The World - Part 2
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I'm also enjoying the story. This is a great and creative idea! |
| 2019-10-24 01:06:38 |
Fateful Gay Experience
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This story has appeared here at least twice besides this incarnation, under different titles. It doesn't improve. |